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39. You have received a letter from your English-speaking pen-friend David who writes 40. Human cloning experiments should not be controlled by the government (Сочинения ЕГЭ английский язык)

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39.Ekaterinburg

Russia

07/06/20

Dear David,

Thank you for your letter. It was great to hear from you again. I’m sorry I haven’t answered earlier but I was busy with my school report.

In your letter you asked me about adolescents in my country. Well, I believe that a Russian typical teenager is a person who seems to be in a blue mood, but he or she is actually very kind and helpful.

Young people enjoy doing sport, going to the musical school, learning different things etc. The most popular leisure activities are walking with friends and listening to music the youngsters prefer.

In your letter you’ve mentioned about going to try your new skateboard. Do you have prints on it? What is a brand of your skateboard? How much does it cost?

Anyway, I need to go now because I have lots of homework to do.

Write back soon!

Best wishes,

Maxim

40. One issue that has caused lots of controversy over the years is that human cloning experiments ought not to be controlled by the authority. I would like to express my opinion on this problem.

My personal view is that experiments on cloning people should not be controlled by the state power, because they can aid the people to have their own child if the mother cannot give a birth to her own one. Also, this procedure is helpful for people with genetic diseases. For instance, if the person has a genetically sore spot, new organs can be transplant instead of his or her old ones.

However, some people do not share this point of view and believe that these experiments ought to be controlled by the government. I suppose they think so because it can be copies of humans with disabilities. Besides, according to a religion, it is a sin, because cloning is connected with unnatural life, not divine.

Personally, I cannot agree with this statement because science is changing now. Also, a big amount of discoveries is invented. That is why I believe that these mistakes, like bad copies would be less in the near future.

In summary, I believe that human cloning experiments is not necessarily should depend on the government, because they can be useful for humanity with proper development of science.

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musical school(music school)

The most popular leisure activities are walking with friends and listening to music the youngsters prefer.(The most popular leisure activities the youngsters prefer are...)

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aid the people(help people)

these mistakes, like bad copies would be less in the near future.(fewer)

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aid the people(the не нужно)

new organs can be transplant(transplanted)

it can be copies of humans(there can be....)

these mistakes, like bad copies would be less in the near future.(there will be fewer mistakes like...)

cloning experiments is not necessarily should depend(experiments should not necessarily depend...)

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it is a sin, because (запятая не нужна)

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